Flash Fiction #13 – I’m an Idiot (Flash! Friday)

I joined another Flash! Friday, and this one was written while I had a headache and was rushed.  But it seems I’ve had some positive responses to it.  The requirement this time was a theme: a fleeting moment.  The photo prompt was a man walking in the rain with an umbrella.  Here’s my entry:

They approached each other, both holding umbrellas in the pounding rain.

If she asks me to stay, I will, he thought.

I wish he would stay, she thought.

They made eye contact and smiled. Gary’s heart thumped. He heard the heartbeat in his head. Hannah’s stomach twisted. The butterflies were very active.

Gary’s eyes drew downward, then locked onto Hannah’s.

“Hello,” he said. “It’s not so nice out, is it?”

Hannah nodded. “Pretty bad weather.” She touched her hair and sighed. “Uh,” she started.

“You know, it’s not the best weather to leave on a plane in,” he said.

“No, I don’t think so. You should—“

“I mean, it’s really depressing, not that it’s dangerous,” he added. “They always fly in rain.”

Hannah smiled. “Yeah. Look, Gary—“ She hesitated.

Gary cocked his head to the side. “Yes?”

She shook her head. “Mm-mm. It’s nothing.” They looked at each other. “No, it’s not nothing. Gary—“

Gary waited. He looked down at his watch.

“Gary, good luck. I’ll miss you,” she said. She looked calm, but held back a sob.

Gary looked down. “Good-bye.” He walked past her.

I’m an idiot, thought Hannah. Why didn’t I say something?

I’m an idiot, thought Gary. I thought she loved me.

Comments or questions are very welcome.  Thanks for reading!


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